Lunch

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I did<<<S63>>> not like the way Joseph Monninger's narrator in "Lunch", <<<G65>>> stalked<<<G31>>> his wife and her husband. Throughout the story, the narrator follows his ex-wife and her husband, without them ever knowing that he was<<<G31>>> present. He spies on their every move. There is even one moment in the story where<<<G33>>> the narrator,<<<G65>>> bends over a folding chair, deliberately hiding from his ex-wife and her husband; he enjoys the advantage. I see that as being kind of creepy and unnecessary.<<<S27>>> The narrator then says, "You realize, as you do it, that you are invisible to him, the new husband, because you have never met him. You are a spy in your wife's camp, you remind yourself, and you feel pleased and full of blood, your mouth open to take in steady breaths".<<<S11>>> In this passage the narrator admits that he is pleased that he can continue to spy on his ex and her husband without being seen, and this causes him to breathe with excitation. He uses the advantage of being unknown to have a common conversation with the husband, not revealing he has been following them all along. The narrator's choice to stalk and spy on his ex-wife, and to talk with husband without presenting himself, makes the story quite awkward, and non-enjoyable for me.<<<G33>>> He should have be should have been man enough to at least say hi, instead running off like a weirdo.<<<S27>>>
Much of this is excellently done, although some of the parts of the paragraph are somewhat misplaced?Good first effort?
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Missing supporting quote

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Indent first line of paragraph

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Unnecessary comma

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Verb tense (error)

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Instructor Comment

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Missing/misplaced parenthetical citation

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